“Aomori Elegy III”—Miyazawa Kenji (1896-1933)
I did this translation almost a decade ago, as part of my final for an upper-level undergraduate course called Readings in Modern Japanese II. If I were doing this translation today it would probably be significantly different, but I am preserving the way I initially did it.
Miyazawa wrote several versions of “Aomori Elegy” (青森挽歌 Aomori banka), most much longer than this one. It is a Modernist poem that in some versions has pronounced Buddhist themes; in all of its forms, it represents Miyazawa’s efforts to come to term with the early death of his younger sister Toshiko.
This particular version has never had a translation published before and is in the public domain in Japan, whose copyright regime is the lifetime of the author plus seventy years. I’m electing to put this translation under a Creative Commons Attribution/Share-Alike license. Anybody may copy, distribute, display, perform, and make derivative works and remixes based on this translation only if they attribute the translation to both Miyazawa Kenji and me. Anybody may distribute derivative works under a license not more restrictive than this license.
Aomori Elegy III
In the remaining mist of the thawed silicate siesta[1]
through the icy glass of the windows
the scent of apples drawing unto dawn
becoming a transparent cord flows in.
And outside monads of nephrite and silver
as they are full of gas emitted from the half-moon
into the guts of cirrocumulus
the moonbeams piercing through
make a weirder fluorescent plate
exude the weirder and weirder scent or light
that comes through the very smooth hard glass.
❦
It is not that it is because it is Aomori
but that it is more or less a phenomenon that always occurs
when the moon enters the cirrocumulus
that appears like this near to the dawn
or remains melting in the blue sky.
When I stand up in this berth by night
more or less everybody is sleeping.
In the seats in the midst of the right-hand side
pale opened peacock feathers
the child nursing a soft grass-colored dream
Toshiko, they look like you.
❦
“Sometimes in life we see our perfect double
at the Hōryūji depot
in some other steam train
a child exactly the same.”
On some morning so Father said.
And it seems it was me
in the December after that person died
as if it was yeast the fine snow
the most severe driving snowstorm
came down as I ran down the slope from school.
Before the pure white glass of Yanagisawa Clothiers
within the smoke of that indigo evening cloud
I met a woman in a black cloak.
Her eyes were hidden in her head-covering
her jaw was white and her teeth clean
and she looked at me as if to laugh a little.
(Naturally this pertained to the refractive index of the wind and the clouds.)
I nearly screamed.
(What, you, saying some plausible thing
like “you died”?
Yet here you are now walking around.)
Still surely I so screamed.
But since it was in that kind of tempestuous snowstorm
that voice was lost in the wind
having disintegrated into the wind I am bereft[2].
❦
“In the great house that commands such a view of the ocean
when I slept with my face upturned
with a hello-hello-hello-hello
over and over again the policeman awoke me.”
Those wrinkled loose white clothes
in the evening, one night, under that kind of electric light of yours
the senior-high-school teacher who sat down there
when he arrived in Aomori
did he say to eat an apple?
The sea is shining all around
and around now there are no crimson apples.
If it was fresh green apples he meant
those are certainly ready now.
[1] Neologism; compound; meaning is unclear; both words are now obscure.
[2] Literally “have lost a part”.